Serkian Romance Language
I started making a Central Asian Romance Language called Serkian (from Serica, the Roman word for China) out of boredom. I am uncertain how much like a Romance Language this sounds or how grammatically correct it is, as I did it by intuition mostly. I would like some feedback
The language is from a world where the Byzantines conquered much of northern Mesopotamia and Northern Iran from Arabs, and the Latin spread out to those parts, and though it didn't catch on there, it did catch on in the city of Nishapur and from there spread out more into Central Asia.
Here are the Lyrics of the song Belisarius by Farya Faraji from YouTube in Serkian, Latin, and English as sample text:
(assume pronunciation rules for letters is like English; "ch" and "tha" make similar sounds and the like)
Serkian:
Ladaus Rumay Empersim so be naksus Impusum?
Nayreh Larania Amay Ruma, Ne Nayra Elibernis.
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Milletes Rumayos
Nasreth Impuryum sos
Sangonum Yabaria
Regrot eot Rumay!
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Qomso Ifrikhunay,
sangon vandillos, khyzali dehdo sont!
Laranie, Geliber, Krai nayron Krayetti.
Ladaus Rumay so, Belaisariarus!
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Badayos Etalya Laranis, Gutikkis, bariyura eyo sont.
Laraniyi, Gutikki, Yabariyi...
Ladaus Rumay so, Belaisariarus!
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Taypaes Lazakiya, chu Sangon Sassanisangrum, khyzali dehdo sont!
Eyave, kheshruyev, Mahlukait, inime...
Ladaus Rumay so, Belaisariaus!
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Shehro deda Attagia Kalamit minaut es
Zimati Totilla, be Ruma senne be antiki.
Bre Krais beno be to, Nayre delati Krayasiti nasreth.
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Ayalis Danubu Sangonum Hunnurum khyzati dehdo sont!
Eyave Zabergan, Nayre Atilla be to!
Ladaus Rumay so, Belaisariaus!
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Latin:
Gladius Rōmae imperī sum, Ubi’st nostrum imperium?
Nē plōrā, mater Rōma, Dēnuō flōrēbis,
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Cīvis Romānus sum,
Sed sine imperiō sum,
Sanguine barbarōrum,
Renāta erit Rōma!
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Arēnae Āfricānae,
Cum sanguis Vandalōrum rubrae factae sunt,
Plōrā Gelimer, Rēx sine rēgnō,
Gladius Rōmae sum, Belisārius!
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Hortī Ītaliae lacrimīs Gothicīs fertilēs factī sunt,
Plōrāte, Gothicī, barbarī,
Gladius Rōmae sum, Belisārius!
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Montēs, Lazicae, Cum sanguis Sassanidārum, rubrī factae sunt!
Vāde, Chosroē, mortālis anime!
Gladius Rōmae sum, Belisārius!
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Urbī ferro flammāque minatus est,
Mementō, Totila, Rōmam antīquam esse,
Sī rēx bonus es tū, nē nēlē rēgīnam nostram,
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Glaciēs Dānuviī sanguine Hunnōrum, rubrae factae sunt,
Vāde, Zabergan, Attila nōn es tū,
Gladius Rōmae sum, Belisārius!
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English:
I am Rome's sword. Where is our empire?
Weep not, mother Rome, again shall you prosper.
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A citizen of Rome I am,
yet without an empire I am,
In barbarians' blood shall Rome be reborn!
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The sands of Africa,
with Vandals' blood, are turned red!
Weep Gelimer, king without a kingdom,
I am the sword of Rome, Belisarius!
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The gardens of Italy, with Goth's tears, are made fertile,
Weep, Goths, barbarians,
I am the sword of Rome, Belisarius!
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The mountains of Lazica, with Sassanians' blood, are turned red,
Away, Khosrow, you mortal soul!
I am the sword of Rome, Belisarius!
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The city is threatened with fire and sword,
Remember Totila, how Rome is ancient,
If you are a true king, destroy not our queen.
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The ices of the Danube, with Huns' blood, are turned red,
Away, Zabergan, you are no Attila,
I am the sword of Rome, Belisarius!